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Old 8th February 2018, 8:05 PM   #61
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The bragging part is the first thing I noticed. First name basis on the best restaurants? Yawn, maybe a gold digger or professional dater would be delighted to hear that, not self-reliant women.
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Old 8th February 2018, 8:07 PM   #62
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I would read first sentence and stop reading. Just be very bored. Hopefully you’re extremely cute

The best bumble profile I’ve seen a guy have began with “Listen here, mother*****ers”

But truly I do not think that will even fit

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Old 8th February 2018, 8:10 PM   #63
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I, too, am in the camp that this profile comes across as full of itself, bragging, boastful -- you get the picture.

Perhaps tone things down a bit.
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Old 8th February 2018, 8:14 PM   #64
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Old 8th February 2018, 10:36 PM   #65
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The bragging part is the first thing I noticed. First name basis on the best restaurants? Yawn, maybe a gold digger or professional dater would be delighted to hear that, not self-reliant women.
I didn't say at the "best restaurants". I said "several restaurants" A lot of places I go to are small local places that aren't expensive or what would be considered the "best".

I've seen lots of profiles that say they enjoy trying new restaurants so I was trying to think of a way to say I like going out to restaurants in a different way
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Old 8th February 2018, 10:38 PM   #66
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Imo, it is too long (will that even fit on a swipe app?) Keep it to your first sentence or something around that long. This one is longer than your Match one.

I agree that it doesn’t show off enough personality and is too showy

No waffles

What was showy? Saying I'm well rounded? I'm just trying to figure out how to mention things I'm interested in to see if I have things in common with her.

How would you fix it within the short space you're given? Besides adding the waffles back in of course?
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Old 8th February 2018, 10:40 PM   #67
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Get rid of the bit about being on first name basis with restaurant staff.

Oh and you're a chocolatier? Why isn't that expanded upon? That one word "chocolatier" is pretty much the only thing I care about!
I hoped that would draw her in! There's such limited space I don't know what to emphasize and try to explain more about and what to leave out.
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Old 8th February 2018, 10:42 PM   #68
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I didn't say at the "best restaurants". I said "several restaurants" A lot of places I go to are small local places that aren't expensive or what would be considered the "best".

I've seen lots of profiles that say they enjoy trying new restaurants so I was trying to think of a way to say I like going out to restaurants in a different way
Yes, instead you're an adventurous eater, you're saying you've got a few restaurants on rotatation
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Old 8th February 2018, 10:43 PM   #69
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Imo, it is too long (will that even fit on a swipe app?) Keep it to your first sentence or something around that long. This one is longer than your Match one.

I agree that it doesn’t show off enough personality and is too showy

No waffles
Hey Cookies... what if it said

"Waffles ??"

and nothing else
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Old 9th February 2018, 12:12 AM   #70
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It lacks humor and wit.
See if you can incorporate that somehow.
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Old 9th February 2018, 12:22 AM   #71
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none of this **** matters. Are you good looking? I mean, really good looking? With good pics? Put all your pics you're considering on something like photofeeler and get votes. You can say "duur I like purty rocks" and as long as you look like Tom Brady you're all good. You can write all about your wonderful active life and tennis playing and eating out at restaurants and if you're not a 9 or a 10 you may get the occasional swipe from a desperate, likely traditionally, historically, unattractive woman or the random 6 who likes what you have to say. Then, look forward to the 6 not actually messaging you before the 24 hours are up. All the 7's and above have 1000 men to swipe through and won't have time for you if you aren't supermodel quality.

good luck brother!
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Old 9th February 2018, 12:26 AM   #72
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This is what I had on Tinder

Your new plus one. Wear heels. I am 6'2" and love to dance. Active & Health-conscious. Prefer red wine or dark beer. Cool under pressure. Smarter than a 5th grader. Able to leap tall buildings in a single-- well, nevermind. Just swipe right so we can see how amazing we are together.

I wasn't on long but it seemed to work. My future wife super liked me in less than a month.
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Old 9th February 2018, 12:50 AM   #73
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My man, this is a very generic profile. Everybody is funny in their own ways. Do not directly say you're funny and witty. Say something that's funny and witty. Actions speak louder than words. I'm a funny guy, but you'll never know it unless you meet me in person. That's why it's best to leave it off your profile.

Also, no need to bring money in the equation. I'm a sports writer, I don't make a whole lot of money, and I land lots of dates. Instead, put that you're college educated, like I do. That's attractive and will win you good women.

Lastly, a simple sentence stating I'm athletic or I work out is sufficient enough. Tell her about your tennis hobbies later down the road.

This would be perfect: I'm a lover of food, an exotic traveling photographer, college educated, and an athlete. Throw in a funny or witty statement at the end if you'd like.
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Old 9th February 2018, 12:53 AM   #74
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none of this **** matters. Are you good looking? I mean, really good looking? With good pics? Put all your pics you're considering on something like photofeeler and get votes. You can say "duur I like purty rocks" and as long as you look like Tom Brady you're all good. You can write all about your wonderful active life and tennis playing and eating out at restaurants and if you're not a 9 or a 10 you may get the occasional swipe from a desperate, likely traditionally, historically, unattractive woman or the random 6 who likes what you have to say. Then, look forward to the 6 not actually messaging you before the 24 hours are up. All the 7's and above have 1000 men to swipe through and won't have time for you if you aren't supermodel quality.

good luck brother!
Right on dude.

Peoples attention span nowadays are about 3-5 seconds if you’re lucky. The first thing they would look for and notice is your photograph and if you don’t catch their attention in the first 3-5 seconds then that prospect is out. I’d spend a lot of money on 3-4 great quality photos ie. hire a professional photographer because they would know how to take your photo to get the most out of your good side/position correctly, utilize proper lighting and I would just keep my profile simple like those two above. They gave great advice.

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Old 9th February 2018, 11:44 AM   #75
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I almost prefer when they don’t have a profile because most of the time they are a turn off to me. I can’t count the plethora of profiles that include:

1) Travel! Get your passport ready!
2) Love to laugh
3) Like spontaneous adventure
4) Dirty martinis (I don’t know what makes a drink dirty nor do I care as I don’t drink)
5) Looking for my “partner in crime”
6) Know the difference between they’re, their, and there
7) “Big Fan” of the Oxford comma - honestly, I’d rather here about your menstrual cycles than your grammar snobbery.
8) ”Love exploring everything this great city are has to offer”
9) Tacos! - Seriously? WTF?
10) And lets not forget....”NO HOOKUPS!”

It’s the same tired profile again, and again, and again.

Perhaps it’s NYC? Perhaps I need a break lol.
Definitely not a NYC thing. It's the same here in Indiana. I've also been thinking of moving to California and it's the same there.

I find it incredibly funny and hypocritical that women want you to have this WOW! profile to grab there attention however there profile is basic and all the same to the next female.
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