Guest Posted August 19, 2006 Posted August 19, 2006 My boyfriend and i of 5 years broke up. It was a very messy break up that took a while to happen but it did. He is a very unemotional guy, and i am very emotional. But heres the deal. i know tihs sounds lame but i wrote him a poem. I know that it is usually what a guy does for a girl but writing it helped me out. I want to know if i should send him this poem or not ? i also wanted advice on if it was good. I am so emotional the peom could be bad and i would not know. So please give me advice on if i should send it and if it is good. Eyes so gorgeous, it’s hard to look away, Smile so innocent, that makes me want to stay. Arms so loving holding me through the night, Attraction so strong I can’t wait to shut the light. Young love so strong; my heart is all yours, Yet you keep emotion behind closed doors. I want to break through and find the real you, But much damage has been done, and it’s hard to break through. I wish to return to times where happiness was all ours, Where we would laugh, talk, and be together, enjoying us for hours. I know in my heart, you are what I need, But pain has been brought to both sides from envy, and from greed, To move on and grow was truly what we did need, But confusion took over, and my heart was left to bleed. The only truth that was left to shine through, Was that I was still in love with you, Hoping a love for me, was still within you.
Tony T Posted August 19, 2006 Posted August 19, 2006 NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO Never, ever send a poem to a guy you had a nasty break up with. He doesn't deserve it. If you do, a month or two down the line you will feel like a fool because his reaction will only be repulsion, disgust and anger. Obviously you cared for him and you were inspired to write this very nice poem because of the ensuing pain. It's quite excellent and I'm sorry the inspiration to write it came from such heartbreak. Go with the first few lines, take out the negative stuff about the break up and the damage, etc., write more positive luvy duvy stuff and save it in a drawer to give some wonderful, deserving guy you get in a relationship with in the future. Do a good job with it, because it is very good...the positive part, and give it to every guy you date after three or four months. It's worth repeating....to the RIGHT person.
Guest Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 well the break up was not that nasty, i jsut really want another shot, but i cant tell if he has hope for us in the future
Tony T Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 well the break up was not that nasty, i jsut really want another shot, but i cant tell if he has hope for us in the future DUH? If he has hope and you have hope then why would the two of you break up??? If you want another shot, talk to him. Just don't give him that poem. It is simply not appropriate at this time. Poems are for romantic times...not to get somebody back that you have just broken up with. Call him up and just ask him straighaway...is this a permanent thing...or do you see us getting back together at some point? DON'T SEND THE POEM! It is very well written, however.
Diver012 Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 I thought your poem was outstanding. Keep writing, and writing and writing. It does help
bunny25k Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 i want to share with you this poem i wrote: F riendship is for the best? O pen the heart to see R uptured and torn apart E very single part of me V iciously painful E ven down to my soul R ejuvenate my spirit I must take control N evermind the past? M y memories, my life Y ears of building a future H opes of becoming the wife E ventually I will move on A ccepting all that friendship brings R emembering what love is all about T he fight for happy endings
Ariadne Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 So please give me advice on if i should send it and if it is good. Yes! Send it. And it's beautiful. Ariadne
norajane Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 5 years...you get a little leeway to send something like that when you've been together that long. I'm sure he's well aware that you are emotional, so he probably won't be surprised when he receives it. You may be disappointed, though, if he doesn't reply. And someone who is emotional feels that disappointment very deeply. So give it some thought, and consider whether you can handle it if he reads it and doesn't share the same hope you do.
ImmaBeAlright Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 My boyfriend and i of 5 years broke up. It was a very messy break up that took a while to happen but it did. He is a very unemotional guy, and i am very emotional. But heres the deal. i know tihs sounds lame but i wrote him a poem. I know that it is usually what a guy does for a girl but writing it helped me out. I want to know if i should send him this poem or not ? i also wanted advice on if it was good. I am so emotional the peom could be bad and i would not know. So please give me advice on if i should send it and if it is good. Eyes so gorgeous, it’s hard to look away, Smile so innocent, that makes me want to stay. Arms so loving holding me through the night, Attraction so strong I can’t wait to shut the light. Young love so strong; my heart is all yours, Yet you keep emotion behind closed doors. I want to break through and find the real you, But much damage has been done, and it’s hard to break through. I wish to return to times where happiness was all ours, Where we would laugh, talk, and be together, enjoying us for hours. I know in my heart, you are what I need, But pain has been brought to both sides from envy, and from greed, To move on and grow was truly what we did need, But confusion took over, and my heart was left to bleed. The only truth that was left to shine through, Was that I was still in love with you, Hoping a love for me, was still within you. Unequivocal NO!
Outcast Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 OK. I'm sorry to be the downer here but it's just not a good poem. Now, if I really loved someone and that person sent me a poem like that, I'd certainly appreciate the thought behind it and the care that must have gone into it, but the poem itself wouldn't impress me. In fact, if you wrote it as prose instead, it would be much better. However, since most people seem to think it's great, then maybe he might, too, however I agree with Tony T that since you are no longer in a relationship, now's not the time to send this to him. Put it in your diary and read it over in years to come.
JaneInVegas Posted August 20, 2006 Posted August 20, 2006 Speaking as a person involved with a VERY unemotional man, I am going to give it to you straight. It DOESN'T MATTER whether you give him the poem or not. (And by the way, I loved it. It's a great poem, and I agree with the person that said you should rewrite it for another guy someday.) What you're trying to do - and I know this from personal experience - is trying to squeeze a tiny drop of emotion from someone who doesn't have an ounce of emotion to give you. If he reads that beautiful poem of yours, to him it would be the same thing as reading the back of a cereal box. He simply is NOT going to get it. As someone else said, it probably will just bring out the disgust in him, because it's raw emotion, and unemotional people absolutely despise it in all forms. Men like this usually think of emotions as 'weakness'. Therefore, this is just going to make him think of you as even 'weaker' than he already does. If you seriously need a guy to show you love and affection, to show his emotions, then you need to move on. If you think you can live with an unemotional guy and care about him enough to deal with this indefinitely, then stay with him. But darlin' ... that poem is not going to get one ounce of emotion out of him. Good luck to you!! HUGS
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