bobsmith76 Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 Ok, I'm living in a rather unpopulated county so there are only about 30 or 40 women on the market on Online Dating Sites. There's this one girl that I match really with and I've written her twice in two months. Hopefully I will impress her with my persistence. It's time to write her a poem, since I have nothing to lose and she probably won't respond to just a three sentence email which says in effect I'm still interested. Since no one liked me last poem http://www.loveshack.org/forums/romantic/dating/468843-trying-get-date-writing-girl-poems I've decided very reluctantly to try short poems. So here's the poem I'm going to send her. Any comments would help. I realize that on paper I might not possess all the raving spasmo that you seek in a man, and that you might prefer someone who effuses a greater deluge of sparklo-diamond, but keep in mind that all people in person are radically different from what they seem in the jungles of the internet. In real life I euphoriate alluria, I am flush with mental jasmine, and I regularly bathe myself in whirlpools of dream. Few men understand true love's requirements, imperatives and stipulations, but I assure that I do and am eager to expose to you its ability to transform one shackled in the ash-gutter into one absorbed in star-bliss, floating amongst chrysantheman comets, all their senses pie-eyed with fantasto-light.
Poppygoodwill Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 She'll either love the gesture, or not get it at all. And if it comes to that point, I would advise you to give up. Will be interesting to see what happens. Keep us posted.
Author bobsmith76 Posted May 2, 2014 Author Posted May 2, 2014 Let me respond ahead of time to those quitters who are willing to give up on their dreams after the first rejection. You've got to be persistent and go after what you want. You can't let rejection discourage. Ambitious people who succeed don't let rejection get them down.
Author bobsmith76 Posted May 2, 2014 Author Posted May 2, 2014 She'll either love the gesture, or not get it at all. And if it comes to that point, I would advise you to give up. Will be interesting to see what happens. Keep us posted. Well, she portrays herself as a sophisticated reader of high literature, but I'm old enough to know that that doesn't mean much.
MidwestUSA Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 I don't know what a raving spasmo is, but I'm sure she does. Other than the fact that Google did not help me with chrysantheman, I say it looks good. With a nothing to lose attitude, you've got, well, nothing to lose! Good luck! 3
Valen Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 Let me respond ahead of time to those quitters who are willing to give up on their dreams after the first rejection. You've got to be persistent and go after what you want. You can't let rejection discourage. Ambitious people who succeed don't let rejection get them down. I agree with you bob, you go man! Keep me posted how it turns out.
Poppygoodwill Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 I'm not sure the try try and try again rule applies to romance. Might earn you a restraining order, if taken to the logical exteme. 2
angel.eyes Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 I would send just the first seven lines of this poem. That might catch my interest, if initially I was somewhat not interested, but open. It's actually a very creative way to ask someone to reconsider. The rest seems to veer off the rails a little bit, which may be offputting, or worse yet, scare her.
Els Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 Well this poem gave me a raging boner. Well, OP, if you ever happen to want to bat for the other team, you know who to contact. 1
Author bobsmith76 Posted May 2, 2014 Author Posted May 2, 2014 I'm not sure the try try and try again rule applies to romance. Might earn you a restraining order, if taken to the logical exteme. Well, if she starts showing signs of real annoyance such as "don't contact me again or I'll call the police," that's when you really have to give up. Another good rule is if she gives good reasons for why she doesn't like you. For example, if she says I don't like you because it seems like you belong to a different culture than me or because I don't think we have much in common. That actually is a very good reason not get involved with someone. If she says something like that then she's carefully thought things through and it's time to move on. Another rule I like to use is to only chase after them if they've shown a little bit of interest first such as responding positively to at least one message. The number of women who have responded to one message then stopped is roughly 50% if not more.
soccerrprp Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 Let me respond ahead of time to those quitters who are willing to give up on their dreams after the first rejection. You've got to be persistent and go after what you want. You can't let rejection discourage. Ambitious people who succeed don't let rejection get them down. I went after my current gf, but the circumstances were as cut and dry. When I look back, even after the "rejection," my biggest mistake would have been not to chase her! I was well prepared for out-right, unambiguous rejection when I decided to go after her, but I had nothing to lose. Neither pride nor ego (maybe a little ) drove me, so I was prepared for rejection and ready to move on if that happened. Persistence is admirable in many ways, but in dating, after rejection, be careful that it doesn't become stalk-ish....
Author bobsmith76 Posted May 2, 2014 Author Posted May 2, 2014 What's a chrysantheman? Is that a flower-human hybrid? Chrysanthemum is a flower but to use it as an adjective it can't end in "um" it has to end in a suffix that most adjectives have, "an" is the best choice. So a chrysantheman comet would be a comet that reminds you of that particular flower. 3
Els Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 Chrysanthemum is a flower but to use it as an adjective it can't end in "um" it has to end in a suffix that most adjectives have, "an" is the best choice. So a chrysantheman comet would be a comet that reminds you of that particular flower. How about chrysanthemy or chrysanthemed? 1
Els Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 (edited) Oops, deleting. Bad Els! Edited May 2, 2014 by Elswyth 1
Author bobsmith76 Posted May 2, 2014 Author Posted May 2, 2014 Match said she read my email and she hasn't replied yet. Sometimes they wait a few days but only about 10% of the time. And for someone who didn't respond to the first two emails they only respond later on maybe 10% of the time as well, so consider this poem rejected unless you hear otherwise.
normal person Posted May 2, 2014 Posted May 2, 2014 Match said she read my email and she hasn't replied yet. Sometimes they wait a few days but only about 10% of the time. And for someone who didn't respond to the first two emails they only respond later on maybe 10% of the time as well, so consider this poem rejected unless you hear otherwise. She already ignored you twice and you thought this would do the trick? I've got to say, your persistence is admirable but your judgment might need some tweaking. When I talk to girls about the worst messages they get, one of the most frequent things that comes up is "poems." The girl doesn't even know you and you're putting in lines like "Few men understand true love's requirements, imperatives and stipulations, but I assure that I do and am eager..." You need to make a real connection with her rather than just try and impress her with a bunch of odd words about how you're different than everyone else. The poem is great but it's kind of meaningless if you haven't done anything to spark a connection to begin with. A stranger saying this kind of stuff in a poem is very odd, in my opinion. Then again, I guess you didn't have much to lose. Just my two cents.
Author bobsmith76 Posted May 3, 2014 Author Posted May 3, 2014 Then again, I guess you didn't have much to lose. Just my two cents. Well, at least we agree on that.
dispatch3d Posted May 3, 2014 Posted May 3, 2014 Alright so I thought writing some girl you don't know a poem was ****ing stupid but whatever. If you figure out a poem that does make girls that are strangers want to sleep with you please post it here so I can use it.
torturedartist Posted May 3, 2014 Posted May 3, 2014 Ok, I'm living in a rather unpopulated county so there are only about 30 or 40 women on the market on Online Dating Sites. There's this one girl that I match really with and I've written her twice in two months. Hopefully I will impress her with my persistence. It's time to write her a poem, since I have nothing to lose and she probably won't respond to just a three sentence email which says in effect I'm still interested. Since no one liked me last poem http://www.loveshack.org/forums/romantic/dating/468843-trying-get-date-writing-girl-poems I've decided very reluctantly to try short poems. So here's the poem I'm going to send her. Any comments would help. I realize that on paper I might not possess all the raving spasmo that you seek in a man, and that you might prefer someone who effuses a greater deluge of sparklo-diamond, but keep in mind that all people in person are radically different from what they seem in the jungles of the internet. In real life I euphoriate alluria, I am flush with mental jasmine, and I regularly bathe myself in whirlpools of dream. Few men understand true love's requirements, imperatives and stipulations, but I assure that I do and am eager to expose to you its ability to transform one shackled in the ash-gutter into one absorbed in star-bliss, floating amongst chrysantheman comets, all their senses pie-eyed with fantasto-light. That's some pretty serious persistence to have written her twice in two months. Did you have to wait for the carrier pigeon to get back before sending her the second message? I noticed in the poem that you mention bathing regularly. I'd definitely keep that part. I might suggest adding something about your current job and your investments and/or 401k. Also, what you might like to do on a first date and where you see yourself in 20 years. Other than that, I think you nailed it! Good luck!
Valen Posted May 3, 2014 Posted May 3, 2014 OMG, I'm shocked she didn't respond to your poem. I think you have been born 600 years too late.
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