Does my POF profile look attractive?

[John316C]

Zhane7 toronto Ontariosingles, toronto Ontariowomen

 

[John316C]

I'm interested in what females think.

[CarrieT]

Your left picture is too dark and your right picture is too blurry. You look WAY younger than 27.

 

The rest of your profile is extremely illusive; all the things you love or like but nothing else. Contrast can be key; for example:

 

 

I like exploring, going camping (but hate bugs).

 

Love going to beaches in the summer a lot (but hate sand in my shoes)! Jet skiing/boating.

 

Eating ice-cream coming home, but fight brain freeze.

I love eating healthy. I love making salad (especially with arugula, endive, and walnuts).

 

Love pushing my physical limits (such as…).

 

I listen to lot of self-development programs during the day (like Deepak Chopra but not Dr. Phil).

 

I love applying new knowledge that I learn (like the time I learned to slice through a 4" plank of wood with my big toe).

 

I love learning about astronomy (and would love to show you the moons around Saturn).

[forgetmenot75]

Mmm Pic one is cute, pic 2 no. Plus, keep it short and sweet. Do you really have to enumerate your hobbies, et one by onec? I personally don't care at all. Good luck though

[PegNosePete]

Why do guys always want feedback from women? Does a young lion ask the zebras how to catch them, or does he learn from the other lions?

 

No, sorry to say, it's a really terrible profile.

First pic is too dark, second pic is too blurry. You need more than 2 and they need to be better.

"Not seeking a relationship or any kind of commitment" well you're just after sex then? This will get you NEXTed by 99% of women.

Cheesy headline. Be more original.

Car "N/A"? Yes or no. It's a simple question. N/A implies you have a driving ban or something.

Fill in your interests box, make them one or two word answers and make sure they turn blue (meaning they are recognized and searchable).

 

First line wtf? Get rid.

Get rid of the numbered bullet points, it's like you just copied the profile writing tips.

 

The first paragraph is actually decent, keep it!

 

The second paragraph is a list and quite generic, I would delete all of these.

 

In fact everything from there until the end can go, it's really not the kind of thing that attracts a woman. Youtube links are not allowed and can get your profile nuked, besides no-one is going to follow it anyway until they know you. Instead, write one more proper paragraph about yourself and what you're looking for. Show your personality.

[John316C]

Why do guys always want feedback from women? Does a young lion ask the zebras how to catch them, or does he learn from the other lions?

 

No, sorry to say, it's a really terrible profile.

First pic is too dark, second pic is too blurry. You need more than 2 and they need to be better.

"Not seeking a relationship or any kind of commitment" well you're just after sex then? This will get you NEXTed by 99% of women.

Cheesy headline. Be more original.

Car "N/A"? Yes or no. It's a simple question. N/A implies you have a driving ban or something.

Fill in your interests box, make them one or two word answers and make sure they turn blue (meaning they are recognized and searchable).

 

First line wtf? Get rid.

Get rid of the numbered bullet points, it's like you just copied the profile writing tips.

 

The first paragraph is actually decent, keep it!

 

The second paragraph is a list and quite generic, I would delete all of these.

 

In fact everything from there until the end can go, it's really not the kind of thing that attracts a woman. Youtube links are not allowed and can get your profile nuked, besides no-one is going to follow it anyway until they know you. Instead, write one more proper paragraph about yourself and what you're looking for. Show your personality.

 

 

Depends I haven't met any lions yet online. Thanks, you made some good points. Some I already know but others I'll think about how to change.

[d0nnivain]

You look handsome enough kind of like a young Ben Afflack.

 

The word choices in your written profile & the thoughts you express there were a compete turn off for me. Although you say you want to go back to school & open your own business, you come across as someone who is drifting through life with no ambition whatsoever.

 

You say you have no expectations regarding a relationship & you're open to anything. Most women on OLD want a relationship & a commitment. I can get "whatever" in a bar. What do I need you for?

 

You babble about being unique but fail to tell me anything about why you are unique. Ergo, I concluded that you were a sheep or a lemming. Tell me something interesting.

 

You need to punch up your game & do something with your life if you expect to be successful in business or in dating.

[amaysngrace]

You look like Mick Jagger.

 

Why don't you have a car?

[Janesays]

I would not have read past the words 'no commitment of any kind.'

[John316C]

You look like Mick Jagger.

 

Why don't you have a car?

 

i could use one but i have no need for one. i have a motorcycle. also i drive a van sometimes for work in the family business but i cant use that for anything other than business.