Nyclovin Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Pieces of you remain Though the whole of you is long gone A faded picture of your smile attempts To bring back the brightness in your face A memory of your voice creeps in my head Reminds me of how you spoke words of love and togetherness Our song is playing Loudly I sing along Alone The harmony is lost Light a candle to grieve yesterday I sit in the dark and watch it flicker back and forth The flame rises and fades as the wick descends towards the bottom where it feeds off of the last remaining droplets of wax Soon darkness will engulf the room I will pray for a peaceful sleep and receive only nightmares of you loving me Then awake to the nightmare of the morning Breakfast is served A cold plate of reality With wholesome acceptance on the side I wash it down with cold water The taste is bitter My face hides From my own two eyes Embarrassed of what I have become A product of my own lies A sinner The day proceeds like any other Although where it ends I can not say I look in places hoping to spot a glimpse of a memory, a trace , maybe even see your face Desperation has set in Time does nothing to ease this change A transition of lives From complete to shattered Broken and bruised Too tired to matter Too old to be new It was you who made me feel alive and real
D-Lish Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Don't send it. I'm not saying it's creepy, but it's too much to lay on someone that isn't giving you the time of day. I don't know what the background with your ex is- but I'd go with a "hey, how are you?" if you absolutely feel the need to reach out.
AShogunNamedMarcus Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Are you trying to make her feel upset? Is it a 'screw you for hurting me' poem? It's dreary. I can't imagine someone being thankful for having received that, or inspiring it.
Author Nyclovin Posted December 4, 2013 Author Posted December 4, 2013 She couldn't care if I were dead
carhill Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Work on a more positive poem for someone who celebrates that you're alive. I'd file this one away and pass on sending it. 2
Author Nyclovin Posted December 4, 2013 Author Posted December 4, 2013 I know not to send it , but the whiskey is saying yes 1
carhill Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Tip from old fart: Never make important decisions while intoxicated. How you handle an pivotal personal emotional situation is an important decision. Sober up and revisit. In fact, I'd suggest cutting back on the alcohol during times like this. BTDT.
Am4Real Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Definitely the whiskey yakking here... Hold that one to the morning...or forever. Go with D-lish on this and if you have to reach out, send a hello, but she treats you for dead (your words) so reaching out, in, sideways or upside down makes little sense.
Mario79 Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 I can tell you didnt write her poem. You wrote yourself a poem. Its your suffering and you want to let her know this is how badly I am hurting and you just want her to read it so she know what shes done. I can tell you that the only feeling you might evoke is pity. I swear we sometimes see movies or tv shows where stuff like this flies, but it doesnt work like that. Keep it to yourself, wait a week and read it again. See how if you still feel the same. Your head is right now is in a dark place. 1
MoooOinkBaaa Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 LMFAO LMFAO LMFAO Bro, brah, BRAH. Who are you trying to kill with laughter! She's gonna be crying from that poem but it won't be tears of sadness. She'll think poor you he still hasn't gotten over it and he's just obsessed with me, he's unhealthy. It looks way too co-dependent too. Let's say your ex was thinking of getting back with you. Imagine a different scenario. You're happy, stable, you've met new friends. You are living perfectly happy without her. You don't need her! She might wonder if you've moved on and no longer hooked on her. She might even want to share that happiness with you, miss the old you because break-ups usually happen when someone isn't happy. Wouldn't it look like you cared way more about her if you still told her you did after getting back on your feet and growing, being happy? Rather than still in the gutter of the old relationship where you will just look depressing, weak, unable to cope in hard times, co-dependent, emotionally needy. You'll show you can stand on your own and draw happiness from within you. It'll show your ex doesn't have to pick you up off the floor to make you happy. Think of it like muscles, girls are attracted to strong guys but the most important muscle is the one most men forget to use, their emotional muscle. This poem portrays yours as weak, it could barely get five reps out of a barrister getting your order wrong. Women are attracted to confident, happy, funny guys that are stable in hard times. So find yourself first before you find her. Don't let her see the damage she is capable of doing to a man, because you're unbreakable and that's why she should regret ever giving up on you. Get off the alcohol and the caffeine, get off all stimulants and let your mind recover. "Don’t feel sad over someone who gave up on you, feel sorry for them because they gave up on someone who would have never given up on them." 2
maturityassets Posted December 4, 2013 Posted December 4, 2013 Please don't send this. I'm not going to judge you or anything. Just you are living in total nihilism man. You attributed the value of your life to something that can no longer be attributed to a particular individual. The thing is though just because you don't have her doesn't mean your value of love is gone. But even if it is deflated there can always be other loves or even other values in life that help you live in dignity and pride of one self. This is just a bad moment. Stay away from the hard liquors for a little while. Doesn't seem like you are out of the woods yet when pertaining to your ex. 2
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