jim1174 Posted February 20, 2013 Posted February 20, 2013 I have been trying to meet women on personals and have had no luck. Here is a letter I sent to someone last week. Please tell me what you think. is it good /bad and if it's bad how can I make it better. thanks Hello, I saw your profile and I have to say I think we would be a great match. We share so many interests. Your photo caught my eye as well. You have gorgeous eyes, and your smile absolutely made my day. You mentioned in your profile that you like to rum marathons, I have never done anything like that, but would love to try it some time. Well now let me tell you a little about myself. I am a very passionate person. I am outgoing and very open-minded. I am a great cook and love nothing more than to cook a meal for friends and family. I am an intelligent, fun loving, honest person. I hope you will take a chance and get to know me better. So check out my profile and if you like what you see, then I hope to hear from you. If not, I wish you luck in your search. Sincerely Jim
AMusing Posted February 20, 2013 Posted February 20, 2013 It's not bad, but a few small changes could make it more personal. My friends tell me that a cookie-cutter message (i.e. one that could get sent to any woman) will be deleted faster than anything else. For starters, I'd mention a few interests you share in common, rather than tell her that there are a lot of common interests between you. That'd be doubly appealing if an interest you share is unusual: "I was surprised when you mentioned you are a puppetmaster. I worked as a puppeteer for a few years; I trained under Jim Hensen himself, although I left it to pursue my true passion, miming, back in the 80's." Ditto with compliments. Every woman has a nice eyes & a pretty smile. Something more specific, at least the color of her eyes, would be a little more personal. Same goes for your self-description; it's just a little generic. There's nothing that really stands out. Maybe if you told her a particular dish/type of food you make particularly well? Anyway, the less generic your message, the better the chances of it catching someone's eye. It gives the woman a few interesting tidbits about you, shows her you aren't sending the same message to 100 girls, and hopefully will pique her interest.
TaraMaiden Posted February 20, 2013 Posted February 20, 2013 I wouldn't call that a 'love-letter'.... I would call it an introduction, but personally, I'd tweak it every time according to the recipient....
curlygirl40 Posted February 21, 2013 Posted February 21, 2013 Hello, I saw your profile and I have to say I think we would be a great match. We share so many interests. Your photo caught my eye as well. You have gorgeous eyes, and your smile absolutely made my day. You mentioned in your profile that you like to rum marathons, I have never done anything like that, but would love to try it some time. Well now let me tell you a little about myself. I am a very passionate person. I am outgoing and very open-minded. I am a great cook and love nothing more than to cook a meal for friends and family. I am an intelligent, fun loving, honest person. I hope you will take a chance and get to know me better. So check out my profile and if you like what you see, then I hope to hear from you. If not, I wish you luck in your search. Sincerely Jim I agree with the other poster on the marathon thing. Marathons (26.2 miles) are not something you just decide to try to do. It's a lot of training. If you are sincere about wanting to run you could have said 'I see that you run, I just started to run myself, I'm training to run a 5K this spring'. It always puts me off a little when someone tries to 'sell' themselves so hard in an e-mail when I can read their profile and read all about them. That was my thought when I see you write all sorts of stuff about yourself. 'I'm passionate, fun loving, intelligent, etc., etc., etc.' I think some of it is o.k but don't lay it on so thick. The last thing that caught my eye was when you said 'I hope you will take a chance'. You're a catch for the right person. Don't make it seem like 'take a chance on me, I'm a great guy, please give me a chance'. So now that I just pointed out the bad, it was overall good. Good length, you complemented her, by the marathon reference you can tell that you read her profile. All good stuff. This morning I got a very short e-mail that I thought was cute before I even read this guys profile. All he said was 'I smiled through your whole profile, and now I'm here...tugging on your shirt so you'll notice me'. I have a lot of guy friends who OLD and I tell them that if I'm not attracted to a guy and/or his profile, there is probably nothing you can say in that e-mail that will make me more attracted (except maybe making me lmao). So if you're not getting a lot of responses instead of looking at the e-mails you're sending out, take a look at your profile and your pics. Good luck!!
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