tom22 Posted January 24, 2013 Posted January 24, 2013 Hi! Just looking for some thoughts on my OLD profile.... is it well written? should I add anything? should I change anything? any advice would be great! thanks! (for the record, I'm male and 22) ... Without wanting to pack my profile full of cliches... I'd definitely like to think of myself as a loving, hard working, down to earth, genuine guy and I'd like to think that's what other people think of me as well! I'm a massive music fan.... literally anything. I'm just as happy in a packed London pub jumping around at a bad manners gig as I am at the Barbican listening to James Rhodes give an amazing performance of some of the most beautiful music ever written. I have a full time job so I naturally look forward to enjoying the weekends! a usual weekend would be spent with my close group of friends, either in one of our local pubs, or in town for a night out. For fun, there isn't alot I wouldn't try at least once - I once went on a skiing holiday having never learned to ski in my life and I spent the 2nd and 3rd days of the holiday in hospital! What am I here looking for? I won't say anything in particular, because honestly, I'm really not sure..... but if I can find someone who I want to spend time with, and who wants to spent time with me, then I'll be a happy boy! If I haven't bored you too much and you'd like to know more, or just fancy a chat about anything... drop me an email.
weee111 Posted January 24, 2013 Posted January 24, 2013 Change the last line. Lose the "If I haven't bored you too much and you'd like to know more" and change it so it's a call to action. Something like "Drop me an email, I'd love to chat about anything" but in your own words.
Andy_K Posted January 24, 2013 Posted January 24, 2013 Anecdotes are good. They create more of a connection and make you seem unique. Your line about the skiing holiday is good for this reason, I think you should add more like that. It is also a good example of demonstrating a quality (in this case trying anything once), rather than just saying it. The rest of your profile is okay. Nothing remarkable but nothing bad either. I would expand the 'what you're looking for' section. Girls like it if you know what you want, and if they liked your profile enough they'll still write even if they don't quite fit what you said. You don't need to worry too much about scaring them off.
FitChick Posted January 24, 2013 Posted January 24, 2013 (edited) So if a fat, ugly woman on benefits with five kids by five different men showed up, you'd be fine with that? You're allowed to have preferences. If you want someone slim and want to be politically correct, say you want someone who is athletic or active or takes pride in her appearance. Other than the skiing/hospital and music sentences, I found your profile rather generic. You're loving? How do you express love? For fun, what else would you want to do? Mention something you could do with a girlfriend (dancing, cooking class, theatre, museum) because that gives you a future dating suggestion. Last but not least, have recent, clear photos of your head and a full body shot. No hats or sunglasses. Not with your back to the sun or light source, which puts you in shadow. Not holding up a pint, unless you are looking for a drinking mate. If your friends know you do online dating, have them take photos of you. If you don't want them to know, go to a tourist spot and have a stranger take your picture. They will think you are just another tourist. I do this all the time -- taking pics of tourists and having them take ones of me. Edited January 24, 2013 by FitChick
Author tom22 Posted January 24, 2013 Author Posted January 24, 2013 Thanks for the feedback all of you.... very much appreciated and take everything on board! So if a fat, ugly woman on benefits with five kids by five different men showed up, you'd be fine with that? You're allowed to have preferences. If you want someone slim and want to be politically correct, say you want someone who is athletic or active or takes pride in her appearance. Other than the skiing/hospital and music sentences, I found your profile rather generic. You're loving? How do you express love? For fun, what else would you want to do? Mention something you could do with a girlfriend (dancing, cooking class, theatre, museum) because that gives you a future dating suggestion. Last but not least, have recent, clear photos of your head and a full body shot. No hats or sunglasses. Not with your back to the sun or light source, which puts you in shadow. Not holding up a pint, unless you are looking for a drinking mate. If your friends know you do online dating, have them take photos of you. If you don't want them to know, go to a tourist spot and have a stranger take your picture. They will think you are just another tourist. I do this all the time -- taking pics of tourists and having them take ones of me. Thanks for the tips on pictures. I've got 4 pics on there of just me, 3 of them I've taken in the mirror, and one of them was someone taking a picture of me holding a trophy I won. All of them show my whole body and a big smiley face! Are the pictures taken in the mirror a bad idea?
pteromom Posted January 24, 2013 Posted January 24, 2013 I would go through and correct your capitalization and punctuation. The sentences starting with lower case letters and all the ellipses would put me off. I'd also get rid of "happy boy" - unless you are 16. How about "happy guy" or "happy man"?
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