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Alot of things didn't go as i planned tonight. A week ago i thought i would've been spending my new years with family, but i spent it with my ex who i havent seen in 8 months. She wanted me to stay over until the ball dropped, but I planned to do the one thing I've been trying to knock off my bucket list: kiss someone when it becomes the new year. She instantly laughed and asked if i was joking.. because our history of being on and off boyfriend and girlfriend/friends for 2 years and some change isnt worth a peck on the lips when we're both single. I came home, whipped this up by taking a step back and examining what was REALLY between us.

 

I Stand Before You, A Broken Man



 

Our ways parted for awhile

Until you reached out to me

I don’t know how I lasted this long

Without seeing your smile again

 

But I stand before you, a broken man

With worries and pleas to be welcomed in your arms

So I can break down, let it out

Because I’ve tried as hard as I can

To not become this broken man

 

There isn’t a cure that can be had

No remedy that can be conjured

That could possibly transform me

From my broken stance

 

That look you gave when I started to frown

The tissue you lent when the tears fell down

But never once did you fix me

Because you knew there was nothing left

For me or for you.

 

So I stand before you, this broken man

With nowhere left to run

My time has run out

Even though yours has just begun

 

You don’t understand and you’ll never get it

No matter how many times you try piecing me together

There will be one piece that’s always missing

I hope that piece is in your hand

So since I have nothing left

I will stand, a broken man.

 

Thanks for reading this far, feedback is much appreciated and there's obviously a story behind this if you couldn't tell. Cheers.

~Danny

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Hi Danny,

it's beautiful, but I would not send it to your ex. She laughed at you when you wanted a peck on the lips. Do you really need to tell her you are a broken man because of her? It probably won't make her feel bad or want to give you another chance. It will only make her think you are pathetic and weak. I say this from a place of caring.

 

Stay away from her and don't send her any poems.

 

Good luck and stay strong!

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Hi Danny,

it's beautiful, but I would not send it to your ex. She laughed at you when you wanted a peck on the lips. Do you really need to tell her you are a broken man because of her? It probably won't make her feel bad or want to give you another chance. It will only make her think you are pathetic and weak. I say this from a place of caring.

 

Stay away from her and don't send her any poems.

 

Good luck and stay strong!

 

 

Thank you :) trust me theres plenty of other reasons that my poem is centered around being a broken man other then that peck on the lips. It's almost like through all of the history of me and her being together, it's made me feel broken when i took the time to realize how it felt. Sometimes people dont consider how their actions directly affect the other person. I keep hoping for something that isn't there. I got my closure when i talked to her about it today; just about us in general since we just started being friends. But she's certain that we can't be anything more than what we already are. And with that, along with the 8 months of NC under my belt, I'm moving on.

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