Starnette83 Posted July 24, 2004 Posted July 24, 2004 Poems: frozen I'm frozen inside... my dreams are shattered..my heart is broken.... and i go crazy trying to forget u... its hard to wake and realize i wont see ure face nor hear ure voice... its hard to sleep knowing ill go another night dreamin of u..and u will be holding me close...like u used to! But im frozen baby, cuz u have left me here... and im cold without ure touch.. and i escape in someone elses arms.. but God knows i wish it was u instead of him... but its not..and maybe ure out having some fun.. so i try to forget and i let my feelings escape into someones else mouth.. i kiss him deeply, the way i kissed u.. i grab him tightly..like i grabbed u.. but theres something different... it isnt u... and just that very fact makes me sad.... (Comment on this) 1:38 am Here without you Baby..here i am in my room..all alone..just me and my four walls surrounding me.... If i could have anything i wanted id ask for you! I love you still..despite the tears u made me spill.. had to kiss another boy tonight to help me escape u... it helped but now here i am thinking of you... whY? because u r my dream... I love you...and i cant hide it.. u can see it in my eyes u can hear it in my voice and u can even see it the way i move... I love you babe, why cant u see? why did u leave me here all alone? makes me want to cry but my tears are all run out... and i rather dance and make out with another guy.. cuz for a while it will help.. but then ill come back to u.. and realize im in love with u:(
YellowLioness Posted July 28, 2004 Posted July 28, 2004 First off, if you want your poetry to get better, try using images of how you feel rather then just telling someone that you are hurting. Ex. When it rains I think of you because the salty drops sliding down my cheeks remind me of my own tears the day you left Though the tear drops are plentiful and fresh They wash my gray eyes blue again I can feel something bud and flower within Maybe its spring somewhere beneath my heart I don't know, that's actually pretty lame. But, you get the idea. SHOW people how you feel. I have no dout that you are in pain, but poetry was my major and I can't resist helping out. It sounds like you are rebounding, girlie. I hope that they guys you make out with don't like you except as someone to fool around with, because if they do, they will get heart broken. Only time and distance from the pain will make you feel better. Good luck!
wildturkey Posted July 28, 2004 Posted July 28, 2004 Heal first so you can act rationally. - however, I have been in pain before. Time will take care of mending your feelings back. If you just want to be with someone make things clear. To love is risky.
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