Kiss of Death - Input?

[handsomeone]

Well I dated the typical lying, manipulating, narcissistic, bipolar/borderline personality disorder girl.

 

I sacrificed my self and well being for 8 months to try and help this girl and turn her life around. I invested my emotions, time, love and money and got severed for it in the end with the brutal weapon cheating.

 

She cheated one time, I found out right after it happened, cut her out of my life the second I found out, have been n/c since and made it impossible for her to directly reach me even though she's tried numerous times to get my attention indirectly (through friends, ect.)

 

1.5yrs later I am over her, but reading back through some journals I found a poem I wrote about her. I personally think it's pretty good and think other people who've dated this type of person could relate to it. So I would just like some feedback on what you guys think of it. Thanks.

 

The Kiss of Death

I hate all the lies,

I hate all the pain,

I hate all the tears,

I hate your game,

I hate the manipulation,

I hate the frustration,

I hate the piercing eyes,

I hate the fake cries,

I hate the cheater,

I hate you the man eater,

I hate I wasn't good enough even though I tried,

I hate that you made sure I cried,

I hate that you had to start a fight,

as an attempt to show me you're right,

I hate the channeled anger,

I hate you the blamer,

I hate the deceit,

I hate how you made my heart beat,

I hate that you took a two way street,

made it one-way and felt complete,

I hate how you stole my heart,

only to surrounded it with clouds of dark,

I hate that the only conclusion for having loved you,

is I hated myself and wanted love too,

I hate that we ever met,

I hate you trying to give me the kiss of death.

[Trovador]

Fine. It shows how sensible you are. And how hurt you felt. Hopefully you are healed by now.

 

Now, the fine letters: she didn't do anything to you. You did it yourself when you allowed it. See it this way: Betrayed once, your fault. Betrayed twice, MY fault.

 

And that usually happens when you take a person as a pet project.

 

Believe me, I know what I am talking about.

 

But as I said, I hope you have healed and let the past where it belongs. Keep writing!

[skydiveaddict]

I like your poem. Can you write one for me about a girl who just totally drops from your life with no explanation? Just crushes you and moves on?

Edited October 10, 2010 by skydiveaddict

[handsomeone]

Fine. It shows how sensible you are. And how hurt you felt. Hopefully you are healed by now.

 

Now, the fine letters: she didn't do anything to you. You did it yourself when you allowed it. See it this way: Betrayed once, your fault. Betrayed twice, MY fault.

 

And that usually happens when you take a person as a pet project.

 

Believe me, I know what I am talking about.

 

But as I said, I hope you have healed and let the past where it belongs. Keep writing!

 

Yeah i've come to know this now, I learned it the hard way because I had no one to tell me. I can confidently say it will never happen again. And yes not only am I healed from this. I used it as motivation and energy to drastically change and improve my life. I've been on an upward incline ever since. Not to say their haven't been bumps, but I plowed right through those.

 

Thanks for the review though.

[handsomeone]

I like your poem. Can you write one for me about a girl who just totally drops from your life with no explanation? Just crushes you and moves on?

 

If you give me some more information and describe some of your feelings. I will do my best at writing one for you.