Nilla Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 First, let me say I don't know if this is in the right section of the board, so if it's not, I appologize. So, my girlfriend of almost 3 years left me back in March for another guy, unexpectedly. It was and still is VERY tough to deal with. However, writing has been something that has helped me get through the rough times. In fact, I started to write a song, but I will admit that my writing is not very good. I was wondering if anyone else on the website is good at writing and would be interested in helping me finish this thing off? I plan on finishing it and showing it to her once completed, but I just need one more verse and a chorus and honestly, I have been writers blocked for about a week. If interested in helping me out, please post in here and I will send you a copy of what I have finished so far, hoping you like it and can help me complete it.
Broseph Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 Ill give ya my input but sounds like something that should come from your heart. Interested to see what you got so far. Even give ya my input to think its a good idea to send it.
Author Nilla Posted September 9, 2009 Author Posted September 9, 2009 Ill give ya my input but sounds like something that should come from your heart. Interested to see what you got so far. Even give ya my input to think its a good idea to send it. Broseph, do you have AIM? I'd rather send it to you privately then post it in this thread. Please let me know cause I am really interested in hearing some feedback.
Broseph Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 Unfortunetely I dont atm and I can see why you cannot. I know how your feeling, years ago after me and m fiance broke up I bought a guitar and music became my soul
Author Nilla Posted September 9, 2009 Author Posted September 9, 2009 Facebook, anything really that I could send it to you through rather then posting it in the open thread.
joseffrost Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 Nilla, I've been writing ever since my break up, and worn out my copies of Blood On The Tracks and Heartbreaker for inspiration, so I'll happily take a look.
Author Nilla Posted September 9, 2009 Author Posted September 9, 2009 send it through a personal message on here I don't see how to do that.. This forum isnt like most vbulletin forums I visit.. I don't have that option underneath my user name in the top right, any help?
Author Nilla Posted September 9, 2009 Author Posted September 9, 2009 I'll actually just put a link to it in here for now... Anyone who has posted in this thread thus far please listen to it and leave me some feedback on it. And if you'd be interested in helping me finish the last verse, please step up. I need some help. Thanks a ton guys/girls. [COLOR=#afd1d5]http://www.zshare.net/audio/623086514a3e4303/[/COLOR]
GrayClouds Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 In the musical interludes have a female singer sing slowly (i thinking a high girlish voice): "Sorry we can't work it out, it's time for this to end, "Sorry we can't work it out, But baby we can be friends" The finish the last verse stating your do not want to be friends, your not going to take her crumbs, if she not wise enough to see her loss, go out and do those other bums Then finish the song; I don't care if we work it out I don't care if we work it out I don't care if we work it out First time very angry second time less angry last one confidently (very soft just before the end) lady i wish you well Because its not about winner her over but getting past it. It takes it form being a sad pathetic song to one of personal redemption. When you ask for free advice you get what you pay for:p PS don't give it to her unless you just what to boost her ego.
NopeNah Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 Don't send it to her at all. It's not for her, it's for you. I also wrote a couple of songs during my initial breakup thinking they were for her. When I finished I realised that they were for me and she didn't deserve the ego boost that they would bring. Why would I want her to think she could hurt me that bad? I didn't.. Would it bring her back?NO. Finish the song and keep it for the only person that matters...YOU!
NopeNah Posted September 9, 2009 Posted September 9, 2009 Just listened to it..Nice beat! I'd suggest going with the chorus "Here I go again........ALONE".. It'll tie in nicely with the piano. Make for a nice title also
Author Nilla Posted September 10, 2009 Author Posted September 10, 2009 Thanks for the replies. GrayClouds, I originally intended the final verse to be a "**** you-- what was I thinking type of verse", and still plan on doing it like that. Any other feedback would be greatly appreciated.
GrayClouds Posted September 10, 2009 Posted September 10, 2009 Thanks for the replies. GrayClouds, I originally intended the final verse to be a "**** you-- what was I thinking type of verse", and still plan on doing it like that. Any other feedback would be greatly appreciated. too bitter, confident cool would be better, and much sexier to the ladies
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