hey just wrote this piece i didnt know where to post it

[sunnyjohal]

hey well i had a break up with my ex girlfriend and was trying to go NC but broke it a few times so kept a diary what ever i wanted to talk to her i would write in that diary and ended up writing something which i wont call poetry because i know i am not even close of being a poet but i thought it was pretty neat for someone like me and so true for someone who had a breakup like me :love:i am sorry if i posted in wrong section here it goes

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:love:My beloveds eyes still shine like a mirror

but someone else looks at his face in that mirror.

 

Her demands are same but are fulfilled by someone else

Roads are also the same but are travelled with someone else

 

By gods grace her face still looks like the rising sun

but the light is for someone else

 

My beloveds eyes still shine like a mirror,

but someone else looks at his face in that mirror

 

Making big plans at this tender age was my mistake

Having high hopes on someone so weak was my mistake

 

It was a mistake that i thought kisses are contracts

It was a mistake that i forgot the terms and the facts

 

My beloveds eyes still shine like a mirror

But someone else looks at his face in that mirror

 

Her heart is still same but it cares for someone else

Things she used to say are also same but are about someone else

 

I am not surprised that she changed

But i just look at how time has changed for me

 

My beloveds eyes still shine like a mirror

But someone else looks at his face in that mirror.

 

just let me know if someone liked it i know its not that good too but at least my diary helps me take out my emotions without messing things up and without pushing her away more.

Edited January 7, 2008 by sunnyjohal

[Ronni_W]

Keeping such a diary is an excellent idea -- journaling has great power to help with grieving and healing.

 

Your 'ode to my beloved' (is that one of Rumi's titles?) is certainly heartfelt -- it's "pretty neat" for ANYone to have written it.

 

All of that said, PLEASE do not get any ideas to send it to her...and especially be careful if you intend on still drinking to the point of silliness

[sunnyjohal]

hey thanks ronni i am not drinking anymore but going to gym twice and also turned a vegetarian so that she can notice the six pack that is visible now and i am also thinking of getting two tattoos for myself.but i know its going to be tough showing the six pack and the tatoos to her on the work but i am just worried about the interaction i might have with her on work that might be a problem in getting her back or healing myself.

[Ronni_W]

i am not drinking anymore but going to gym twice and also turned a vegetarian so that she can notice the six pack ...its going to be tough showing the six pack and the tatoos to her on the work ...getting her back or healing myself.

I'm glad you stopped the excessive drinking. Sculpt that 6-pack for YOURSELF only.

 

Don't try to win her back, especially NOT AT WORK -- be professional over there or you could get fired for sexual harassment (I'm not joking about that!)

From your other post, she doesn't want you back, anyway. Do not even go there with her, under any circumstances. Start looking to meet new people and go on dates with other people. Do not act all clingy and needy and like a stalker so she has to end up getting a restraining order against you.

[s_n_d]

Very nice poem.

&& I agree with Ronni_W.

You need to do this for YOURSELF and not for her.