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Originally posted by jenny
lol - i think it is more of a question of whether or not the intended audience will understand and appreciate the seduction, rather than random nitpickery. people often have short attention spans when it comes to sentences, so punctuation is a way of keeping the tension hot in the writing.
consider:
wellwhen i see u i wanna to take your clothes and then go over to the tent and get it on then i will be happy and the next day i will make you breakfast then we will go again in the kitchen cuz marmalde is sexy and u will lick it off but then well be sticky which will attract bears and during my 45th climax and bear will appear and eat me thus destroying our beautiful passionate relationship or maybe just a super hot lay mmmmya o baby smack gurgle mumble dick-lay moan.
without punctuation, it reads like a porn movie. why not slow down; enjoy the places to pause in writing; smell the nouns? grammar is all about taking the time to consider how to get your readers into bed with you.
you can have sincerity coming out of the wazoo but that won't matter if your reader is bored and frustrated by the first 60 words. so, if your intended does indeed talk, think, and write without pause or clause himself, then by all means send as is!
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Point well taken ... if one is writing a novel or an article for a public publishing. Or possibly a letter of information, or just keeping in touch type letter ... "Hello, how are you? ... etc.
Although from what I understood the relationship she was speaking of was already established on one level and she was interested in taking it to another.
The example you wrote most definitely would require punctuation to make a good read as many forms of writing surely would. Academia has it's place in the world indeed.
I can appreciate your extremeness in making your point by the example you wrote. I'm sure you're aware (considering the whole of your writing ability in your post) the example you chose to write, even with punctuation, would be a bad read. The content is bad.
I was referring to something more along the lines of this writing style ....
"overwhelm me with ur desire lay me down with ur passionate fire
consume my soul with ur spirits lust lay me down do what you must
sate this thirst in my loins constant state our passion is ecstasy
our desire is fate control me with ur swollen member dance inside
me until I surrender"
I think most people, upon reading a proclamation (CONTENT) such as the above, would be capable of enjoying it for themselves without the writer's assigned punctuations to direct them.
I don't think many people receiving a writing style such as the above would find it confusing, boring, or frustrating. I could be giving the average person more credit than deserved in terms of creativeity, romance, and flare but I certainly would hope people are mentally and emotionally able to get past their English lessons and read it at a speed and tone that suits them best.
Porn would be considered the content rather than anything to do with puctuation. I could imagine to even the most conservative who might read the above poem realizes it alludes to sexual ecstasy without blatanly saying "Hey let's f**K!".
The reason for my statements on puctuation in the first place was that I felt she needed some encouragement in her new approach. Especially since, in her second post, she seemed to focus on the criticism that had been give and seemed apologetic. Who knows what might drown someones spark of creativity. Message boards often times seems to breed critics, for whatever reason, rather than offering advice to the questions posted.
After all she was asking for advice on a personal level and not about making a career as a writer nor a critic of that particular post. I understood her post perfectly. How much direction do we need?
What you wrote was more like a list of things to do with pornographic blatant blurts rather than an erotic soul felt flow of passion. I understand that not everyone is a romantic but every one is capable (or I would hope) of trying to break the mode when applicable.
I feel encouraging people in trying something different and creative is important than.
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