[leeroy1985]

I wrote this poem for my girlfriend! i added a bit of funny n romance in because she likes it but i jus wondered wether shes'll like it.
What do you all think?

The first time I saw you I fell in love,
Your eyes were shining like the stars above.

I wanted to hold you close, hold you tight,
I need you with me, I need you all night.

I thought I had a chance to show you my other side,
But you wanted someone else, I could of broke down and cried.

That night when we first kissed,
I was so happy, even though I was pissed!

Everyday from then I felt so happy,
Every time I saw you my knees went trembly.

I hoped I could be with you, to make you smile,
And one day maybe I could walk with you up the aisle.

It feels kind of strange to love my best friend,
But id prefer to be your boyfriend.

Now that I’m in love with you,
I wish you could see yourself from my point of view.

Then you’d understand why your all I need,
I’ll love you forever if you’ll love me…. Agreed?

[Illusion24]

That was so cute!!!!!

She'll love it...any fool in love will like it!

[Artifact]

Very sweet
Did you give it to her?

[Pocky]

It's cute. I once had a boyfriend write a poem for me using the first each letter of my name to start the sentence. Women love receiving quirky things like this. I made a few comments to what I noticed on a quick read. I'm sure she'll love it.

I thought I had a chance to show you my other side,
But you wanted someone else, I could of broke down and cried.

I could have not I could of. Common mistake people make - I assume because could've which is could have is often mispronounced as could of so people write it that way, but if you look at it could of doesn't make sense.

Broke = broken

Then you’d understand why your all I need,
I’ll love you forever if you’ll love me…. Agreed?

You're = you are all I need.

[leeroy1985]

Did you give it to her?

No i mailed it to her and just told her id sent her a little something to show her how much i love her!

Anyway.... thanks for the confidence, i appreciate it. Ill post here to let you know what she thinks of it.

Thanks again, Lee

[latida]

Mailing it!

Very romantic!

[leeroy1985]

Originally posted by la]ti[da
Mailing it!

Very romantic!

Do i sense a bit of sarcasm?

Why? Do you think i should of just handed it to her face to face?

First time ive done anything like this so i thought id kill two birds with one stone, let her know ive sent her something and she thinks it sweet and then when she sees it she thinks its evn sweeter (i think!)

[latida]

no sarcasm
I was serious, it is perfect!!