dragonwalker Posted September 2, 2015 Share Posted September 2, 2015 Ok, so I started a new profile on okcupid to look for someone from 22-28 interested in long term dating. I am a 27 year old guy, working, went to college but very inexperienced. I posted an early post which with the help of some people and suggestions I tweaked. I thought it was to long so I've tweaked it again. Tell me what you think. There are some other sections of the profile which I will keep the same. These are on my other post for those interested. ---------------------------------------------------------- My self summary: I am looking for a meaningful relationship that helps bothof us get more out of life. I would like to find someone willing to commit the timeand energy to share in life's ups and downs together but mostly ups! I am an introvert at heart but I enjoy people who respect or share my interests.I find board games help me focus my intellectual side with other people whileadding a bit of competitiveness and excitement. It's great because I can playwith both friends and strangers alike. If you've ever played games like 7Wonders, Ticket to Ride, or Eclipse you'll know what I mean. I have a passionfor biking. I bike as often and as far as I can because it helps me relax, stayactive, provides a natural high, and keeps me in the zone. I don’t “play games” during a relationship and like a good board game playerI'm looking for a partner who has a winning attitude but is patient enough toknow that you can't always make the right choices but you can have the rightattitude. The most important experience is about having fun and enjoying the uniqueexperiences. Link to post Share on other sites
angel.eyes Posted September 2, 2015 Share Posted September 2, 2015 (edited) Fix the word spacing issues. I'm not sure if those resulted when you cut and paste. Maybe add a couple of places you like to bike. Otherwise, looks good. Nice detail. Reads well. Good picture of who you are while keeping it fairly brief and upbeat. Edited September 2, 2015 by angel.eyes Link to post Share on other sites
Maggie4 Posted September 3, 2015 Share Posted September 3, 2015 I think a bit too much dominated by board games. Girls want to know more! You only have the space of a few short paragraphs, don't let one interest dominate it, but also don't rattle off a long list of interests. The biking is a good balance. Link to post Share on other sites
Maggie4 Posted September 3, 2015 Share Posted September 3, 2015 I just read your other post. This profile is better. Think about what you offer a mate, and that's the type you will attract. For example, I asked a guy friend what he thinks he offers a woman, he replied "financial security" (yes, he has a high salary), and sure enough he attracts gold diggers. If you see yourself offering a life of outdoor adventure, then you will attract some sporty types, etc. The goal is not to get as many response as possible. The goal is to find a girl who is a right fit for you. So think about the type of girl you'd like to hear from. Link to post Share on other sites
Hope Shimmers Posted September 5, 2015 Share Posted September 5, 2015 Take out the sentence with the board game examples in the second paragraph (I love Ticket to Ride though) and also take out the phrase "and like a good board game player" in the first sentence of the third paragraph. Link to post Share on other sites
Siquijor Posted September 5, 2015 Share Posted September 5, 2015 For example, I asked a guy friend what he thinks he offers a woman, he replied "financial security" (yes, he has a high salary), and sure enough he attracts gold diggers. Uh oh. Have a word with your friend for his own sake. Link to post Share on other sites
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